What a delightful tease.  You grasp the tone and style of the manga so well, and I love your attention to clothing detail and to the specific subject of sex and food.  I can picture every moment, and it feels so much like a chapter from the original!  I also love that you dispense with any details about the mission; as you seem to rightly imply: who cares (they're all the same and let's get to the seduction/flirtation/outrage)!  Since no good review should be without constructive criticism, I merely query on the use of Farenheit vs. Celsius in England for describing the temperature.  Thank you for a delightful little tease!

Simply wonderful. I adore these kind of fics... so sensual and yet so... innocent, yanno? Lovely. Mmm. The Major +  Eroica = One True Pair. ^^