... and now anything could happen! I like your careful, detailed style, making the reader look at each small detail. It adds to the sense of Dorian being stuck in enforced stillness on the train. This piece would make a great opening for a story. I'd love to know what happens next! (Do you think you will write more and tell us?)

Author's Response: More will follow, I assure. Though there will be a gap before the next instalment. This is due to the fact that I am slow.